in the base of my atriums, i hear it. most of the time, it's there-- tangling with my blood and giggling into the palpitations, just enough for moonlight to eavesdrop. but this secret squirms, restless and eager. it crawls through my trachea, brighter than a firefly, and my whispers recede with its laughter. i thrash against my skin, pulling at the creases as if hoping to see its smile, but it tiptoes along the corridors of my ventricles, kept from light, lies, and curious eyes.
it was beautiful. i had never seen it, but i knew. it was beautiful because this was love. i could feel it in the echo of my wrist, the cadence of my throat. the quiet grace of perfection filled my soul.
i cried when the doctor told me of my heart murmur. a genetic defect, he explained, assuring me that my imperfection could be fixed. i reached towards myself, discerning the staccato speech of the secret. the man asked me if i had found my flaw, and i shook my head as i listened.
"all i hear is love," i repeated until the faint fantasia blurred my sight. "all i hear is love."















Comments
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Truth be told,
I'd rather be sold
than juggle stepping stones.
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if i could, i would give you everything in the world. the moon-- right out of the sky.
- austin michael, january seventh.
It somewhat clashes with the first paragraph, or maybe not depending on how you think about it. I think that the way you described everything in the first paragraph fits everything perfectly by itself.
Your work keeps getting better and better - or more and more enjoyable at the very least.
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"The most beautiful experience we can have is the mysterious." - Albert Einstein
"Use no way as way. Use no limitation as limitation." - Bruce Lee
Until darkness falls,
- Shadow -
the idea of the second paragraph was to drastically contrast the dreamy and romantic feel of the first. it was to bring the harshness of reality down, and to shake the truth in more effectively. because isn't that what life does?
however! if it's more of hindrance than a help, i'll keep that in mind.
thank you for the read and comment!!!
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if i could, i would give you everything in the world. the moon-- right out of the sky.
- austin michael, january seventh.
BUT, now that I think about it, I've just come up with a good idea! Why don't you make a poem that is a response or a contrast/foil to this poem?! It is something that I like to do, so I thought that you might like it as well! What do you think?
Oh, and you're definitely welcome! ^^
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"The most beautiful experience we can have is the mysterious." - Albert Einstein
"Use no way as way. Use no limitation as limitation." - Bruce Lee
Until darkness falls,
- Shadow -
I like it a lot.
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